Monday, April 13, 2009

Life on steps

I saw some steps rising high
Just a foot beside me
Why not try climb them up?
Yea! It may be a chance

I took my leg forward in joy
Then on to the step I went
The steps went on rising high
As much as I climbed up high

I be careful I sang my mind
But lot more hardships waited
The path of steps narrowed too
Just a sigh could fall me

Pew! At last I reached the end
the end I suppose of the stairs
Alas! My eyebrows are grey
And my legs do shake very way

Oh! I am old old and very old
So long I was on stairs of life
There I see the heaven in front
No! thus were my life a step.

36 comments:

Think Tank said...

thats life :)

अविनाश said...

beautifully composed

pughy said...

That is very though prevoking, the picture sends out a poignant message too. Thank you for sharing.


GJ and Carol x

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

A good write Susan also the words made me think (something rare for me) lol.Thanks fro sharing.

Take care.

Yvonne.

The Whites said...

Very nice - thanks for sharing.

Thanks for stopping by my blog last week!

Mandy

Arv said...

well captured... I like this journey too...

these steps are a lil higher now though :(

take care mate... cheers...

Heatherlyn said...

I really love how you have a picture to coordinate so beautifully with your poetry

Margaret Cloud said...

This is a nice post about life, that is so true, you start out in life and before you know it you are elderly.

judypatooote said...

I like that...it makes one think... judy

Priya said...

More than getting old, its the strength which kept her moving forward isn't it.

Debbie said...

I know the fear of not knowing how soon I will reach the last step.

dreamscapes said...

speaks the hard reality.
very nice :)

-Aiz.

Illeen said...

Well thats the stairway to heaven..nice lines :)

Janice Thomson said...

A lovely write Susan with a subtle profoundness between the lines.
Delightful photo.

paramveer said...

nice picture nice verse!!....so beautifully crafted

Devika said...

Nice one, Susan :)

Heaven ofcourse has a price!
getting old even otherwise one would, for the hell of a world we have down here, no Susan? :)

wishes,
devika

The Muse said...

oh...these words have touched my heart!

Destitute Of Experience said...

That makes you think in a whole different dimension... It makes me hurry with what I'm doing, I dont wanna be old, not so soon! gotta a lot to do.

Thanks for putting it down so well.

Joseph Pulikotil said...

Hi Susan :)

Amazing poem along with a matching photo.

I like the way you portrayed the passing of life or lets say time. When you are young climbing is easy but as you grow older you have so many problems and worries to contend with. I will say my childhood days and my school days were the best period of my life. As I grew older the steps became narrower and climbing became more and more difficult with worries, cares,troubles, money problems, job problems etc.

I am still climbing and will continue to climb till the last day.

I still look forward to heaven as I looked forward to it when I was young because Jesus said HE will take me to heaven when I die. In other words, when I die I will not look forward to heaven because I will be heaven with God.

Many thanks for sharing this wonderful poetry.
Joseph :)

Willie said...

nice

Natural Moments said...

Up and Up we go,
When it stops,
I just don't know.

Santosh PM said...

Superb composition. :)

Jeanette said...

, thanks for stopping by my place, So I could come and read this Beautiful poetry

chubskulit said...

very realistic poem..

WELCOME TO MY WORLD OF POETRY: said...

Thanks for your visit Susan, much appreciated.


Yvonne,

Sunny Mom said...

Thanks for your comment! And no I don't mind, thanks!

Rhonda said...

Love it! Wow...you have many talents...fun blogs to check out! Cake maker? I love to bake! Fun!

Thanks for stopping by tonight!

Leslie said...

Isn't it the truth?! Enjoy every moment of it. Thanks for visiting.

Devil Incarnate... said...

beautifully writte.... well u r right, tats al life is abt..

Cat said...

excellent poem, so fluid

Life with Kaishon said...

Poignant.

Erin said...

I like the thought of climbing higher and higher. Thank you.

droL said...

this is astounding! im so glad I've dropped by your blog!

best regards!

Newbie Mommy said...

Fascinating and really truly gripping..

Ms. Neha Gandhi said...

beautiful...wow to such beautiful words to describe the journey of life

GOKUL SREENIVASS said...

nice femin keep it up!!!!

:)

gokul